Wednesday, September 29, 2010

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A retired Cold War vet who resides at a veterans hospital due to Post traumatic stress and amnesia is sitting in room and watching the news. As he critiques the news and its host, he is then subdued from behind by unknown figures. He struggles with his captors for a few seconds before he is tied up and taken away. The scene switches to an interrogation room where we meet the two Gov. Agents that abducted him. An argument breaks out between the man and the agents as to why he was kidnapped. He then threatens to call the cops. An agent takes a cell phone out his pocket (this phone was taken from the veteran during the kidnapping) and throws it into the trash can. In a cold voice the agents explains their reasons for kidnapping him, stating that they suspect him of being a traitor to the U.S. and working with the Russians. The man has no recollection of any of this and thinks the agents are foolish. This irritates and angers the agents and they take him to another room, the struggling to get away. The room is lit with only one light over a wooden chair and a bucket of water. The veteran knows what is about to happen and tries to break away from the agents but to no avail. He is then strapped into the chair and EKGs (electrocardiographs) are placed on his body. One agent then repeats his question and the man cannot answer. The agent gives a signal a dial is turned on the EKG which sends the veteran spasming. The agent repeats his question; breathing hard the veteran begs for mercy in Russian. He is shocked and asked a question again to where he then pleads in Korean. This is repeated three more times (different question, different language begging the agent to stop, and being shocked again) Seeing this as the last straw the agent turns up the voltage and as the vet he spasming he begins to scream for mercy in an unknown language. This surprises the agents and they begin to suspect that they are dealing with more than just normal man.

8 comments:

  1. Ok, this sounds interesting but I think I need more information. Is this language otherworldly? I'm interested but I'd like more information. If he is a retired WWII vet, he is old. This is awkward. No one wants to see an old man get interrogated and shocked. Is this a period piece? Does it take place in the 50s? The Cold War seems to be a bit more of a relevant reason for being interrogated post WWII.

    maggie

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  2. This sounds really dense in script and dialogue, you should probably upload a sample for next Wednesday. As for the plot itself- I'm more interested in what happens during and right after the electric shock happens. I feel like at this part it could be very interesting how you lead the viewer. However, where you are leading them now is quite anticlimactic? Maybe you should bust out the crazy language right away and then lead us to something even more epic and exciting.

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  3. This does catch my interest, but I would like it if there was a little more information there, such as to why he resides at the hospital, how he was able to be kidnapped, just generally more information on what leads up to all of this. I think the multiple languages will also make it interesting especially with a weird new one, so defiantly keep that.

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  4. I am really interested in this idea of a mysterious, unknown language. Language is a really compelling topic to work with because it's such a key element in culture and if we don't understand it, it can cause serious barriers. It may be difficult do accomplish this electric shock treatment believably without looking comedic (no offense) just finding the perfect actor and setting to make it look serious and more dramatic will be a task. But the idea has got potential for sure. You should explore the mysterious language element, that idea could far in many different directions.

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  5. IT's a good plot outline, my only worry is about the language. What languages will he speak at first? Is the unknown language just one that the interrogators have never heard and can't find a translator for or a completely alien language that you made up just for the film? Language can be really powerful so you need to have that hammered out the most.

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  6. The idea is interesting but I don't feel like you have told us enough to give you proper feed back. Is this how it ends? What happens?

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  8. This sounds a little intense for just a five minute movie, but seems like it could make a really interesting 10-15 minute movie. I'm also interested in how you would do a killing scene with our little editing experience.

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